Here’s a little animation test I conducted today based on Amy’s colour script panel of Elm hill featuring boiling lines and falling leaves. I left the character animation out for now but I think I’ll get that in for submission.
Amy took the liberty of reframing this shot from how I envisioned it in the storyboard to better compose her vision of the scene, given that she’ll be animating this section in the final version.
I took my collaged storyboard and made this animatic with a hastily recorded reading of the poem. It’s somewhat successful with the pacing and tone, but there’s quite a lot wrong too.
From a story perspective, the jump from the opening straight to the signs feels quite abrupt. I feel there may be a missing sequence about settling in the city? Considering I’ve already dropped the castle scene from this edit, we could afford to drop back two more scenes in a new sequence here? Something about tower blocks and terraces.
We’re definitely gonna need some kind of music/sound track at some point.
Amy immediately made it clear she was sceptical about the transition from the train station sign to the skyline arguing that we wouldn’t ever be able to make it work. She had some thoughts about transitions from shot to shot during the bulk of the film perhaps being delicate wipes and fades, maybe even illustrating themselves. I said this is definitely something we’ll experiment with.
Another thing Amy suggested was changing ‘I’ll miss you’ to ‘We’ll miss you’ to make it more inclusive.
Here’s my first iteration of a storyboard for the love letters project. I’ve more or less collaged this together from the group’s drawings and my own to create a narrative that works with the script I wrote at the beginning of last week. It in no way reflects the final style, only narrative order and composition.
The first section introduces the city from the train station sign to the skyline. I’ve put together that collaged, stylised version of the skyline together so it can be illustrated in that composition.
Then we go through some of the best street names, each will be visited by an illustration of their street sign in situation. This section, despite taking up half the storyboard, will be quick cut and not particularly long.
Then we hit the section that explores the lanes. The bits that match up to the script here are the Thorns panel that should appear on ‘Everything I could ever need’, Wensum Park on ‘All the geese I could ever feed’ and The Mischeif on ‘All the tequila I could ever drink’.
We fade into night time on the puppet man who matches with ‘The perfect madness of a rural city’. Through Grosvenor’s and the city view, they will be connected by the fireworks display.
As we decide to edit the poem and sequencing of the narrative, I’m sure this will change. Personally, I feel the mischief shot feels out of place being a night time scene between two day time ones and I feel the snowy castle shot may be out of place too and may need replacing. The signs section may feel better placed in the middle of the film.
But right now, we’re running with it. Amy has begun translating the scenes from my storyboard into the style she’s decided works best based upon my panel of the Thorn’s shot. She liked how the yellow of the paper shone through and thought the red of the Thorn’s shop front was a good colour to base the colour script off.
In writing this script, I have taken it upon myself as director to disregard the group’s narrative order that was noted on a piece of paper in my absence (poor effort on my part there) and establish a solid new running order in order to get the project moving on rails. This will inform the storyboard I create this week.
What I’ve taken from the group’s ideas is create a narrative that somewhat matches their concept of a seasonal ‘year in the city’. Instead I’ve made a narrative based around a solar, day night format, starting in the morning and finishing in the night with the fireworks.
I’ve added an introduction based around the train references in the poem, leading the audience into the city and giving us a place to start. I’ve also added a shot of the city skyline at the beginning that can be recycled at the end with a night time version of the same shot. Nice and efficient.
These changes got some friction when I announced them on the group chat, but I’m sure they’ll come around in due time.
My attendance has been poor because I went to Leeds for a long weekend to go get the soundtrack recorded for my beaver project and missed a meeting and a session. It wont happen again. Promise!
Calling at Ely, Nowhere and Norwich
You’re a Fine City at the end of the line
No one is here by mistake, no one passes through
Upper goat, lower goat, rampant horse
Golden ball, lobster lane
Don’t get lost in TOMBLAND
Scary though they might sound,
Your tangled lanes are beautiful
With plenty hidden between them
You have all the things I ever need
All the Tequila I could ever drink
All the geese I could ever feed
The perfect madness of a rural city
And the folk that tie the lanes together
Between bar-stools and pews
Three years were a canary yellow dream
I’ll miss you,
Here’s my working script for the Norwich Love Letter project.
Here’s some sketches from around Norwich I took for the Norwich Love Letters project. We went out as a group to tour round all the most important places to us.
When we met up in the morning, I told everyone not to take too much time and keep everything loose; we dont want over complication. Along the way, I thought it appropriate to say not to worry about warping the drawings, I quite liked it when that happened. It gave the drawings the quality of being like a memory, just the kind of thing I’m looking for.
This is the first major step we’ve taken as I didn’t quite realise the urgency of this project. After yesterdays session, I realise I need to step up and take responsibility for this project.
My next step is to write a manifesto for what I want us to achieve with this project and collate all the drawings from to today to begin to assemble some kind of story.
Back in September, when we were given a vague brief for the collaboration project, I had an idea about a short film dedicated to Norwich and the memories I’ve collected being here in the last couple of years. All of us have been here, so I thought it would make a good collaboration. Then I watched this short on Cartoon Brew.
I thought this was a rather touching little film about a time and a place and drew some inspiration for how my own little Norwich tribute could come together.
I have a couple people in the class who are interested in getting involved and I’m considering reaching out to Illustration to see if anyone there would like to get involved.